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Time Waits for Nothing

Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how much success I achieve in my life will be dependent on how I view time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. While there are instances where one has control over her outcomes, there are also periods when her results appear to be based solely on time. In turn, one's perspective on this relationship determines whether one views time as enabling or inhibiting. For much of my law school career, I have felt powerless in light of what was expected of me in relation to the time I was meant to fulfill those hopes. Recently, I have come to the realization that power isn't solely derived by time. There are other forces at work, namely preparation, that allow time to afford certain outcomes.


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Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how much success I achieve in my life will be is dependent on how I view time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. While there are instances where one has control over her outcomes, there are also periods when her outcomes appear to be based solely on time. In turn, one's perspective on this relationship determines whether one views time as enabling or inhibiting. For much of my law school career, I have felt powerless in light of what was expected of me in relation to the time I was meant to fulfill those hopes. Recently, I have come to the realization that power isn't solely derived by time. There are other forces at work, namely preparation, that allow time to afford certain outcomes.
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Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how much success I achieve in my life will be dependent on how I view time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. While there are instances where one has control over her outcomes, there are also periods when her results appear to be based solely on time. In turn, one's perspective on this relationship determines whether one views time as enabling or inhibiting. For much of my law school career, I have felt powerless in light of what was expected of me in relation to the time I was meant to fulfill those hopes. Recently, I have come to the realization that power isn't solely derived by time. There are other forces at work, namely preparation, that allow time to afford certain outcomes.
 

In Light of My Law School Experience

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In analyzing my law school experience, I can't help but notice how my conception of time has changed from empowering to stifling. In college, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn't believe that her work would be of quality, she was not forced to turn it in. There was an instance when I didn't turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline and still received an A in the class. That's not to say that I didn't respect the deadlines that my professors set for me. Alternatively, I came to appreciate the pursuit of a particular piece of knowledge and the level of comprehension necessary to create a thoughtful analysis. I felt I had more control over my actions and subsequently, my time. Although I loved the ways in which my college experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally, it did not prepare me for how I would be expected to use my time at Columbia Law School. Columbia has shown me repeatedly that taking one's time is not the way of the world; there is a time to take in information and a time frame to use that information. Those in law school who can learn and apply this way of thinking will succeed while those who do not adapt quickly enough will not. In other words, law school wasn't going to wait for me to adjust.
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In analyzing my law school experience, I can't help but notice how my conception of time has changed from one of empowerment to a thought of stifling. In college, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn't believe that her work would be of quality, she was not forced to turn it in. There was an instance when I didn't turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline and still received an A in the class. That's not to say that I didn't respect the deadlines that my professors set for me. Alternatively, I came to appreciate the pursuit of a particular piece of knowledge and the level of comprehension necessary to create a thoughtful analysis. I felt I had more control over my actions and subsequently, my time. Although I loved the ways in which my college experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally, it did not prepare me for how I would be expected to use my time at Columbia Law School. Columbia has shown me repeatedly that taking one's time is not the way of the world; there is a time to take in information and a time frame to use that information. Those in law school who can learn and apply this way of thinking will succeed while those who do not adapt quickly enough will not. In other words, law school wasn't going to wait for me to adjust.
 

How One is Controlled by Time

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I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who will subsequently be impacted by legal and policy decisions. Lack of control in a situation can make it seem as though time is the determining factor. The Family Center, a non-profit full service agency, provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives, housing, and benefits. Even though as an intern I am more familiar with legal procedures and laws in comparison to many of the agency's clients, I continue to feel a lack of control. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time has implications for whether someone's loved ones know their final wishes before she passes away. The circumstances I have observed this summer are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . LeBlanc? follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will provide her young family with a sense of consistency. Unfortunately, because of the ways in which the welfare programs are constantly being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on opportunities that would have been available to her had she known about the programs and applied to them earlier. Not being prepared, or aware of the various plans at the time, forces Coco to lose out. Time isn't on her side because she doesn't have the ability to use her personal actions to shape her present situation.
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I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who are impacted by legal and policy decisions. Lack of control in a situation can make it seem as though time is the determining factor. The Family Center, a non-profit full service agency, provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives, housing, and benefits. Even though, as an intern, I was more familiar with legal procedures and laws in comparison to many of the agency's clients, I continued to feel a lack of control. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time had implications for whether someone's loved ones knew their final wishes before she passed away. The circumstances I have observed this summer are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . LeBlanc? follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will provide her young family with a sense of consistency. Unfortunately, because of the ways in which the welfare programs are constantly being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on opportunities that would have been available to her had she known about the programs and applied to them earlier. Not being prepared, or aware of the various plans at the time, forces Coco to lose out. Time isn't on her side because she doesn't have the ability to use her personal actions to shape her present situation.
 

How One Controls Their Time

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Although there are certain situations where one doesn't believe she has control over her time, there continues to be ways in which she can make time work in her favor. Within the law, time can control who becomes successful and how successfully lawyers can deal with the matters of their clients. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discusses how the arrival of certain law firms coincided with new trends in the legal profession. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in a professional environment that had previously excluded them. Since Jewish lawyers had been excluded from certain aspects of the legal profession, they developed skills in areas of the law that other law firms weren't interested in practicing. As the demands of clients changed, the skills the Jewish lawyers had acquired were suddenly valuable. Jewish lawyers may not have been in control of time but they were in control of their actions. When the time came, they were able to adjust and work with it because they were prepared to. By having some level of control over what they did, they were able to take advantage of time.
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Although there are certain situations where one doesn't believe she has control over her time, there continues to be ways in which she can make time work in her favor. Within the law, time can control who becomes successful and how successfully lawyers can deal with the matters of their clients. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discusses how the rise of certain law firms coincided with new trends in the legal profession. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in a professional environment that had previously ignored them. Since Jewish lawyers had been excluded from certain aspects of the legal profession, they developed skills in areas of the law that other law firms weren't interested in practicing. As the demands of clients changed, the skills the Jewish lawyers had acquired were suddenly valuable. Jewish lawyers may not have been in control of time but they were in control of their actions. When the time came, they were able to adjust and work with new opportunities because they were prepared. By having some level of control over what they did, they were able to take advantage of time.
 

Accepting Time Limitations

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When I considered results of time as arbitrary, I viewed it as an oppressive force. The divergent ways that time impacts one's life can create a sense of powerlessness as is the case with Coco struggles to maintain stability. Her narrative isn't exclusive and the ways in which Jewish lawyers transitioned their skills into the mainstream directly challenges it. The narrative of the Jewish Lawyers is one of empowerment and control through preparation. Their ability to achieve newfound success reflects the idea that time will only limit you as much as you are unable to prepare for it. Time may not wait for anything, but one can lay the groundwork and wait for time to work for them.
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When I believed time created arbitrary results, I viewed it as an oppressive force. The divergent ways that time impacts one's life can create a sense of powerlessness as is the case with Coco struggles to maintain stability. Her narrative isn't exclusive; the ways in which Jewish lawyers used their skills to transition into the mainstream serves as a direct challenge. The narrative of Jewish Lawyers is one of empowerment and control through preparation. Their ability to achieve newfound success reflects the idea that time will only limit you as much as you are unable to prepare for it. Time may not wait for anything, but one can lay the groundwork and wait for time to work for her.
 
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Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how much success I achieve in my life will be is dependent on how I view time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. While there are instances where one has control over her outcomes, there are also periods when her outcomes appear to be based solely on time. In turn, one's perspective on this relationship determines whether one views time as enabling or inhibiting. For much of my law school career, I have felt powerless in light of what was expected of me in relation to the time I was meant to fulfill those expectations. Recently, I have come to the realization that power isn't solely derived by time. There are other forces at work, namely preparation, that allow time to afford certain outcomes.
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Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how much success I achieve in my life will be is dependent on how I view time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. While there are instances where one has control over her outcomes, there are also periods when her outcomes appear to be based solely on time. In turn, one's perspective on this relationship determines whether one views time as enabling or inhibiting. For much of my law school career, I have felt powerless in light of what was expected of me in relation to the time I was meant to fulfill those hopes. Recently, I have come to the realization that power isn't solely derived by time. There are other forces at work, namely preparation, that allow time to afford certain outcomes.
 

In Light of My Law School Experience

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In analyzing my law school experience, I can't help but notice how my conception of time has changed from empowering to stifling. In college, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn't believe that her work would be of quality, she was not forced to turn it in. There was an instance when I didn't turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline and still received an A in the class. That's not to say that I didn't respect the deadlines that my professors set for me. Alternatively, I came to appreciate the pursuit of a particular piece of knowledge and the level of comprehension necessary to create a thoughtful analysis. I felt I had more control over my actions and subsequently, my time. Although I loved the ways in which my college experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally, it did not prepare me for how one is expected to use their time at Columbia Law School. Columbia has shown me repeatedly that taking one's time is not the way of the world; there is a time to take in information and a time frame to use that information. Those in law school who can learn and apply this way of thinking will succeed while those who do not adapt quickly enough will not. In other words, law school wasn't going to wait for me to adjust.
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In analyzing my law school experience, I can't help but notice how my conception of time has changed from empowering to stifling. In college, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn't believe that her work would be of quality, she was not forced to turn it in. There was an instance when I didn't turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline and still received an A in the class. That's not to say that I didn't respect the deadlines that my professors set for me. Alternatively, I came to appreciate the pursuit of a particular piece of knowledge and the level of comprehension necessary to create a thoughtful analysis. I felt I had more control over my actions and subsequently, my time. Although I loved the ways in which my college experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally, it did not prepare me for how I would be expected to use my time at Columbia Law School. Columbia has shown me repeatedly that taking one's time is not the way of the world; there is a time to take in information and a time frame to use that information. Those in law school who can learn and apply this way of thinking will succeed while those who do not adapt quickly enough will not. In other words, law school wasn't going to wait for me to adjust.
 

How One is Controlled by Time

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I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who will subsequently be impacted by legal and policy decisions. Lack of control in a situation can make it seem as though time is the determining factor. The Family Center, a non-profit full service agency, provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives, housing, and benefits. Even though I am more familiar with legal procedures and laws as an intern in comparison to many of the agency's clients, I continue to feel a loss of control. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time means the difference between whether someone's loved ones will know their final wishes before they pass away. The circumstances I have observed this summer are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . LeBlanc? follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will provide her young family with a sense of consistency. Unfortunately, because of the ways in which the welfare programs are constantly being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on opportunities that would have been available to her had she known about them and applied at a particular time. Not being prepared, or aware of the various programs at the time, forces Coco to lose out. Time isn't on her side because she doesn't have the ability to use her personal actions to shape the situation.
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I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who will subsequently be impacted by legal and policy decisions. Lack of control in a situation can make it seem as though time is the determining factor. The Family Center, a non-profit full service agency, provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives, housing, and benefits. Even though as an intern I am more familiar with legal procedures and laws in comparison to many of the agency's clients, I continue to feel a lack of control. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time has implications for whether someone's loved ones know their final wishes before she passes away. The circumstances I have observed this summer are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . LeBlanc? follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will provide her young family with a sense of consistency. Unfortunately, because of the ways in which the welfare programs are constantly being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on opportunities that would have been available to her had she known about the programs and applied to them earlier. Not being prepared, or aware of the various plans at the time, forces Coco to lose out. Time isn't on her side because she doesn't have the ability to use her personal actions to shape her present situation.
 

How One Controls Their Time

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Although there are certain situations where one doesn't believe she has control over her time, there continues to be ways in which she can make time work in her favor. Within the law, time can control who becomes successful and how successfully lawyers can deal with the matters of their clients. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discusses how the arrival of certain law firms coincided with new trends in the legal profession. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in a professional environment that had previously excluded them. Since Jewish lawyers had been excluded from certain aspects of the legal profession, they developed skills in areas of the law that other law firms weren't interested in practicing. As the demands of clients changed, the skills the Jewish lawyers had acquired were suddenly valuable. Lawyers were not in control of their time but they were in control of their actions. When the time came, they were able to adjust and work with it. By having some level of control over what they did, they were able to make time work for them.
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Although there are certain situations where one doesn't believe she has control over her time, there continues to be ways in which she can make time work in her favor. Within the law, time can control who becomes successful and how successfully lawyers can deal with the matters of their clients. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discusses how the arrival of certain law firms coincided with new trends in the legal profession. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in a professional environment that had previously excluded them. Since Jewish lawyers had been excluded from certain aspects of the legal profession, they developed skills in areas of the law that other law firms weren't interested in practicing. As the demands of clients changed, the skills the Jewish lawyers had acquired were suddenly valuable. Jewish lawyers may not have been in control of time but they were in control of their actions. When the time came, they were able to adjust and work with it because they were prepared to. By having some level of control over what they did, they were able to take advantage of time.
 

Accepting Time Limitations

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Considering the seemingly arbitrary results of time, it is reasonable that I would look at time as an oppressive force. The divergent ways that time impacts one's life can create a sense of powerlessness as is the case with Coco struggles to maintain stability. This narrative isn't exclusive. The ways in which Jewish lawyers transitioned their skills into the mainstream offers an alternative view. Their narrative is one of empowerment and control through preparation. Their ability to achieve newfound success reflects the idea that time will only limit you as much as you are unable to prepare for it. Time may not wait for anything, but one can lay the groundwork and wait for time to work for them.
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When I considered results of time as arbitrary, I viewed it as an oppressive force. The divergent ways that time impacts one's life can create a sense of powerlessness as is the case with Coco struggles to maintain stability. Her narrative isn't exclusive and the ways in which Jewish lawyers transitioned their skills into the mainstream directly challenges it. The narrative of the Jewish Lawyers is one of empowerment and control through preparation. Their ability to achieve newfound success reflects the idea that time will only limit you as much as you are unable to prepare for it. Time may not wait for anything, but one can lay the groundwork and wait for time to work for them.
 
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Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how successful certain aspects of my life will be dependent on how I view time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. While there are instances where one has control over her outcomes based on timing, there are also times when one’s outcome appears to be based solely on time. In turn, one’s perspective on this relationship determines whether one views time as enabling or inhibiting. For much of my law school career, I have felt powerless in light of what was expected of me and the time I was meant to fulfill those expectations. The thing that I have come to realize is that power isn’t solely derived by time. There are other forces at work that allow time to work in a certain way.
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Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how much success I achieve in my life will be is dependent on how I view time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. While there are instances where one has control over her outcomes, there are also periods when her outcomes appear to be based solely on time. In turn, one's perspective on this relationship determines whether one views time as enabling or inhibiting. For much of my law school career, I have felt powerless in light of what was expected of me in relation to the time I was meant to fulfill those expectations. Recently, I have come to the realization that power isn't solely derived by time. There are other forces at work, namely preparation, that allow time to afford certain outcomes.
 

In Light of My Law School Experience

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In analyzing my law school experience, I can’t help but notice how my conception of time has changed. In college, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn’t believe that her work would be of quality, she was not forced to turn it in. There was an instance when I didn’t turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline, and received an A in the class. That’s not to say that I didn’t respect the deadlines that my professors set for me. Rather I came to appreciate the pursuit of a particular piece of knowledge and the level of comprehension necessary to create a thoughtful analysis. I felt I had more control over my actions and subsequently, my time Although I loved the ways in which my college experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally, it did not prepare me for Columbia Law School. Columbia has shown me repeatedly that taking one’s time is not the way of the world; there is a time to take in information and a time frame to use that information. Those in law school who can learn and apply this way of thinking will succeed while those who do not adapt quickly enough will not succeed.
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In analyzing my law school experience, I can't help but notice how my conception of time has changed from empowering to stifling. In college, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn't believe that her work would be of quality, she was not forced to turn it in. There was an instance when I didn't turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline and still received an A in the class. That's not to say that I didn't respect the deadlines that my professors set for me. Alternatively, I came to appreciate the pursuit of a particular piece of knowledge and the level of comprehension necessary to create a thoughtful analysis. I felt I had more control over my actions and subsequently, my time. Although I loved the ways in which my college experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally, it did not prepare me for how one is expected to use their time at Columbia Law School. Columbia has shown me repeatedly that taking one's time is not the way of the world; there is a time to take in information and a time frame to use that information. Those in law school who can learn and apply this way of thinking will succeed while those who do not adapt quickly enough will not. In other words, law school wasn't going to wait for me to adjust.
 
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I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who will subsequently be impacted by legal and policy decisions. Within the law, time can control who becomes successful and how successfully lawyers can deal with the matters of their clients. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discusses how the arrival of certain law firms coincided with new trends in the legal profession. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in a professional environment that had previously excluded them. Since Jewish lawyers had been excluded from certain aspects of the legal profession, they developed skills in areas of the law that other law firms weren’t interested in handling. As the demands of clients changed, the skills the Jewish lawyers had acquired were suddenly valuable. Lawyers were not in control of “time” but they were in control of their actions. When the time came, they were able to adjust and work with it.
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I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who will subsequently be impacted by legal and policy decisions. Lack of control in a situation can make it seem as though time is the determining factor. The Family Center, a non-profit full service agency, provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives, housing, and benefits. Even though I am more familiar with legal procedures and laws as an intern in comparison to many of the agency's clients, I continue to feel a loss of control. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time means the difference between whether someone's loved ones will know their final wishes before they pass away. The circumstances I have observed this summer are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . LeBlanc? follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will provide her young family with a sense of consistency. Unfortunately, because of the ways in which the welfare programs are constantly being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on opportunities that would have been available to her had she known about them and applied at a particular time. Not being prepared, or aware of the various programs at the time, forces Coco to lose out. Time isn't on her side because she doesn't have the ability to use her personal actions to shape the situation.
 
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Conversely, lack of control in a situation can make it seem as though time is the determining factor. The Family Center, the non-profit I am interning at this summer, provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives, housing, and benefits. Even though I am more familiar with legal procedures and laws in comparison to many of the clients, I continue to feel a lack of control. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time means the difference between having someone’s loved ones know their final wishes before they pass away. There comes a point in time when you don’t have control of a person’s health and time slips away. The circumstances I have observed this summer are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . LeBlanc? follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will provide her young family consistently. Unfortunately, because of the ways in which the welfare programs are constantly being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on opportunities that would have been available to her had she applied at a different time period. Although this book follows the lives of people in the Bronx in the mid 1980s through the mid 1990’s, it is demonstrative of the ways that preparation is essential to be successful at certain times. Not being prepared, or aware of the various programs at the time, forces Coco to lose out. Time isn’t on her side because she doesn’t have the ability to shape the situation.
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How One Controls Their Time

 
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Although there are certain situations where one doesn't believe she has control over her time, there continues to be ways in which she can make time work in her favor. Within the law, time can control who becomes successful and how successfully lawyers can deal with the matters of their clients. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discusses how the arrival of certain law firms coincided with new trends in the legal profession. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in a professional environment that had previously excluded them. Since Jewish lawyers had been excluded from certain aspects of the legal profession, they developed skills in areas of the law that other law firms weren't interested in practicing. As the demands of clients changed, the skills the Jewish lawyers had acquired were suddenly valuable. Lawyers were not in control of their time but they were in control of their actions. When the time came, they were able to adjust and work with it. By having some level of control over what they did, they were able to make time work for them.
 

Accepting Time Limitations

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Considering the seemingly arbitrary results of time, it is reasonable that there are divergent views on time and how it impacts ones power. The ways in which Jewish lawyers transitioned their skills into the mainstream and how Coco struggles to maintain stability is a reflection of what on first glance seems random. If one looks beyond the surface, one will see that time is as important as the preparation that it comes into contact with. Time will only limit you as much as you chose or are unable to prepare for it.
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Considering the seemingly arbitrary results of time, it is reasonable that I would look at time as an oppressive force. The divergent ways that time impacts one's life can create a sense of powerlessness as is the case with Coco struggles to maintain stability. This narrative isn't exclusive. The ways in which Jewish lawyers transitioned their skills into the mainstream offers an alternative view. Their narrative is one of empowerment and control through preparation. Their ability to achieve newfound success reflects the idea that time will only limit you as much as you are unable to prepare for it. Time may not wait for anything, but one can lay the groundwork and wait for time to work for them.
 
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I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who will subsequently be impacted by the legal decisions. Within the law, it can control who becomes successful within the profession and how successful clients will be in dealing with their legal matters. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discussed how the arrival of certain law firms coincided with the trends in the legal professions. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in an environment that had previously excluded them. Since Jewish Lawyers had been excluded from the legal profession, they developed skills in one area of the law that other law firms weren’t interested in handling. AS the times changed the skills that they acquired were seen as being something valuable. This is not to say that hard work is not necessary to obtain success, but that success is contingent on that hard work matching up with the right temporal circumstances. This summer, working at a non-profit has shown me how determinative time can be. The Family Center provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives. Even though I am placed in a position of power, I feel that I really do not possess a lot of power. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time means the difference between having someone’s final wishes known before their death and not having their wishes known. • Housing o I have seen how timing has impacted the types of housing that people can obtain o Section 8 was discontinued/ vouchers that are set to help people to transition These circumstances are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . Leblanc follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will aid her and her young family. Unfortunately, b ecause of the ways in which the welfare programs are being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on oppurtuntites that would have been available to her in a different lifetime. Although this book follows the lives of people in the Bronx in the mid 1980s through the mid 1990’s, it is still useful in looking at the ways in which timing impacts the access that certain members of society have to resources.
 
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Considering the seemingly arbitrary results of time, it is reasonable that there are divergent views on time and how it impacts ones power. The ways in which Jewish lawyers transitioned their skills into the mainstream and how Coco struggles to maintain stability is a reflection of what on first glance seems random. If one looks beyond the surface, one will see that time is as important as the preparation that it comes into contact with. Time will only limit you as much as you chose or are unable to prepare for it.
 
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Although time does create a sense of order, it also creates hard boundaries. It can be an obstacle to accomplishing a goal. It would be difficult to think of a world where time and deadlines didn’t drive people to adequately prepare for something, but I find it troubling to think of how things unfold because of how time impacts it. The way in which lawyers can transition from being on the outskirts of the legal profession to be central to its continuation, the way in which Leblanc frames Coco’s struggles in Random family as a result of the change in welfare reform…Time maintains order but it also creates idiosyncrasies that create unfairness or undue hardship.
 
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Within any career, facets of time can have an impact on the effectiveness of an employee. Time can determine how efficiently a person can complete an assignment, who that employee is able to interact with, or even how likely that person is to advance within <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">their career. These constraints can create an even bigger challenge within the job of the lawyer. Lawyers have to worry about statutes of limitations, deadlines for written assignments, and their ability to interact or connect with certain people. The importance of time was explored in an early class discussion of Lawyerland when Moglen posited that within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media. This statement struck me; not only had I observed this within the limited exposure that I have had to the legal community, I have also seen the ways in which it has impacted my personal and professional life. Looking at my life in terms of the opportunities I have had and the people I have met, I have realized that moving forward in my professional career the impact that time has had on my opportunities. Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that not only do I have to begin to take these time constraints more seriously, but also that how successful certain aspects of my life will be will be dependent on how wisely I use my time. Time (or at least our conception of time) places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. The concept of time can serve as an enabler and as an inhibitor.

As I said last time, the important first step was to figure out how to articulate the central idea in a sentence and to begin the essay with it. That hasn't happened.

"The importance of time was explored in an early class discussion of Lawyerland when Moglen posited that within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media." (Usually, when we use a surname in formal writing, we give it an addition. I don't mind being "Eben" at all, but I'm "Professor" or "Mr." if you use my surname, right?) Did I "posit" something, or state it? Surely you don't think I said that "within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media"? I said, "time is the most important medium in which lawyers work." "Medium" there means tool of art, as oil paint, watercolor, terra cotta or cast bronze. If the idea struck you at the time, then we might expect you to explain what I meant, which you don't.

In Light of My Law School Experience

In undergrad, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was not frowned upon.

"Undergrad" is slang for "college."

Why are you saying this? Shouldn't the topic sentence of the paragraph be the topic of the paragraph, instead of an incidental illustration of an idea we haven't encountered yet?

In fact, it was something that was openly talked about without shame. If <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">a student didn’t believe that <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">they would be able to produce quality work within a specific time period, <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">they should not be forced to do so. I remember I didn’t turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline, and I still received an A in the class. That’s not to say that I didn’t respect the deadlines that my professor had set for me. Instead I came to appreciate the pursuit of knowledge and gained confidence in the belief that there was a level of knowledge on a subject that I could reach before I was asked to produce a product that reflected my knowledge on a topic.

Surely you can render this last sentence in 10 words instead of 44? In addition to brevity, the writing lacks concreteness. Every noun here is abstract.

In looking at time; it had always been my philosophy that <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">things will work <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">itself out versus me finding the need to take advantage of time and using it to shape the outcome of events.

Neither terse nor grammatical. The semi-colon is wrongly used. "Philosophy" is a high word for habit. The sentence means "In the past, I have been undisciplined in my management of time." That's 12 words doing better the work of 35.

Although I loved that my <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">undergrad experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally as an individual, Columbia Law School has shown me over and over again that this is not the way of the world and if I continue to view the world like this, there will not be much room for advancement.

A run-on sentence badly composed. It means "Law school is forcing me to reconsider the habits that served me well in college." That's 15 words doing better the work of 50. Do you see from these examples what editing habits you need to acquire? Writing simply and clearly well help you to think more clearly and more forcefully.

In order to achieve some balance, I have to reconcile the ways in which I used to view time with the new ways in which I am being asked to utilize time. As I step back and realize that I am finished with my first year of law school, I realize that I am an adult. I am in professional School.

Why the capital S?

I am now not only responsible for my own financial and personal needs, but also those of my clients. Even though I am placed in a position of power, I feel that I really do not possess a lot of power. Rather I feel like I am being impacted by time rather than controlling it.

Isn't that precisely the consequence of an undisciplined approach to time? Social action occurs "in" time. Understanding, predicting and intervening in social processes requires good timing. Waiting for "things to work [themselves] out" is the antithesis of a disciplined approach to social action. It is, in other words, not lawyering. For the lawyer, patience—playing a waiting game, enjoying the fruits of time—is a tactical decision, arrived at in order to achieve a specific objective at tolerable cost. It isn't a habit, a "philosophy," or a symptom of untreated anxiety.

I have found that there is a tension in the two ways in which I view time. There is a tension between getting things (as in going through the motions) and doing things with purpose (with passion). The first is just following a specific structure. This utilizes efficiency and allows things to get done in a timely fashion. Just because you are in the motion of doing something does not mean that you will be doing that thing whole heartedly. Meeting deadlines and completing something in a certain fashion often comes at the cost of being able to application of creativity and imagination to the written assignment.

This is coherent with what precedes it. Organization of the essay, weak throughout, breaks down here. Degree of commitment to an activity (among which two possible degrees are "passion" and "going through the motions") seems evidently a new subject, intruding in a fashion the reader has not been given a basis to expect or understand.

The last sentence is a statement of a personal condition, not a general truth. "Meeting deadlines and completing something in a certain fashion" (a typically abstract phrase) is only in tension with "being able to [apply] creativity and imagination" to "a written assignment" if one hasn't gained habits of disciplined work, and if writing remains a puzzle, an obstacle, rather than a way of producing imaginative, creative results. (Note how weak your self-editing was: You left an ungrammatical sentence, containing the nonsense phrase "being able to application of creativity," unrevised.)

What does One Gain and Lose

Time, <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">something of which there is a limited supply of, is often taken for granted.

Why is a truism the topic sentence of this paragraph?

How society tends to conceptualize time can often be more complicated then this simple assertion.

Then why did you begin your paragraph with it? The reader inevitably gains the impression that you don't know where you're going and you're just wasting her time.

The value that <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">people within society <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">places on time can also vary with what they place value on.

Another thundering tautology, expressed ungrammatically. You must edit every sentence for agreement of number in each clause; your mistakes of this kind are frequent, and you must catch all of them.

On the one hand, it does lead to perceived practical outcomes; people are more focused, work with more of a sense of urgency, and work becomes more efficient. On the other hand, it constrains what an individual can focus on. Sometimes precision has to be sacrificed because of the sense of urgency that is placed on something. Also, what can be focused on becomes much more limited. In order to achieve one, the other has to be discarded.

What is "it"? Grammatically, it would seem to be "the value that people place[] on time." But that doesn't make sense here. The remainder of the paragraph seems to assert that we trade efficiency in time for precision or (and?) breadth of focus. Perhaps this is true, perhaps it isn't. Better management of time should impose fewer such trade-offs. I tell the lawyers who work for me that we enjoy the benefit of practicing law slowly, because of the economic organization of our practice. But that doesn't mean we are less productive, or efficient: it means that we don't sell hours, so we don't measure our activity by the number of tasks per hour. We measure rather the number and quality of results achieved with the available resources, including but not limited to working time.

Without a doubt, people who have come before questioned how they could best utilize the time that was available to them, organized their time in light of the different constraints that exist, and impacted how people in the present reflect upon their time.

What does this sentence mean?

Difficulty with Accepting Time Limitations

Time, and the limitations it creates, does create a sense of order. Time forces people to structure their lives in a way that maximizes outcomes. However, time does create hard boundaries. It can become an obstacle to doing what one wants to accomplish. It would be difficult to think of a world where time and deadlines didn’t drive people to adequately prepare for something, but I find it troubling to think of the things that are lost by focusing on the impact of time.

This isn't a conclusion, following something that isn't an argument or the development of an idea.

We haven't moved far enough past the first draft. We need a clearer and more precise central idea, stated at the outset, developed through steps that can be placed in sequence on a tightly-edited outline. We need accurately composed sentences that are brief, clear, and concrete.

Certainly it would be desirable to connect what you have to say with the ideas of others. But "integrating more outside sources" (why "more"? there aren't any here) is not an independent objective: thinking better about the subject is the objective. Reading what other people think about the same and related subjects is a step in that direction. I would have expected you to begin in that fashion: "I'm going to write something about time and work: Who has written about time and work in ways I might find useful in order to build my own thinking?" Why didn't that happen?

 
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Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that how successful certain aspects of my life will be is dependent on how wisely I use my time. Time places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. How one comes to understand time will prove instrumental as to whether it will be viewed as enabling or inhibiting. In Light of My Law School Experience In analyzing my law school experience, I can’t help but notice how my conception of time has changed. In college, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn’t believe that her work would not be of quality, she would not be forced to turn it in. There was one time when I didn’t turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline, and received an A in the class. That’s not to say that I didn’t respect the deadlines that my professor had set for me. Rather I came to appreciate the pursuit of a particular piece of knowledge and the level of comprehension necessary to create a thoughtful analysis. Although I loved the ways in which my college experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally as an individual, it did not prepare me for Columbia Law School. Columbia has shown me repeatedly that taking one’s time is not the way of the world; there is a time to take in information and a time frame to use that information. Those in law school who can learn and apply this way of thinking will succeed while those who do not adapt quickly enough will not succeed.

What does One Gain and Lose

I have not only seen the power of time on people who practice law, but also on those who will subsequently be impacted by the legal decisions. Within the law, it can control who becomes successful within the profession and how successful clients will be in dealing with their legal matters. In Outliers by Malcolm Gladwell, Gladwell discussed how the arrival of certain law firms coincided with the trends in the legal professions. Specifically, he analyzed how Jewish law firms in New York were able to prosper in an environment that had previously excluded them. Since Jewish Lawyers had been excluded from the legal profession, they developed skills in one area of the law that other law firms weren’t interested in handling. AS the times changed the skills that they acquired were seen as being something valuable. This is not to say that hard work is not necessary to obtain success, but that success is contingent on that hard work matching up with the right temporal circumstances. This summer, working at a non-profit has shown me how determinative time can be. The Family Center provides those who have been impacted by severe illnesses legal advice on matters such as advance directives. Even though I am placed in a position of power, I feel that I really do not possess a lot of power. Advance directives are a case in point; reaching someone at a particular time means the difference between having someone’s final wishes known before their death and not having their wishes known. • Housing o I have seen how timing has impacted the types of housing that people can obtain o Section 8 was discontinued/ vouchers that are set to help people to transition These circumstances are effectively captured in Random Family: Love, Drugs, Trouble, and Coming of Age in the Bronx by Adrian Nicole LeBlanc? . Leblanc follows the young mother Coco as she lives an impoverished life and searches for government assistance that will aid her and her young family. Unfortunately, b ecause of the ways in which the welfare programs are being adjusted, Coco falls short or misses out on oppurtuntites that would have been available to her in a different lifetime. Although this book follows the lives of people in the Bronx in the mid 1980s through the mid 1990’s, it is still useful in looking at the ways in which timing impacts the access that certain members of society have to resources.

Difficulty with Accepting Time Limitations

Although time does create a sense of order, it also creates hard boundaries. It can be an obstacle to accomplishing a goal. It would be difficult to think of a world where time and deadlines didn’t drive people to adequately prepare for something, but I find it troubling to think of how things unfold because of how time impacts it. The way in which lawyers can transition from being on the outskirts of the legal profession to be central to its continuation, the way in which Leblanc frames Coco’s struggles in Random family as a result of the change in welfare reform…Time maintains order but it also creates idiosyncrasies that create unfairness or undue hardship.

 
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Within any career, facets of time can have an impact on the effectiveness of an employee. Time can determine how efficiently a person can complete an assignment, who that employee is able to interact with, or even how likely that person is to advance within <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">their career. These constraints can create an even bigger challenge within the job of the lawyer. Lawyers have to worry about statutes of limitations, deadlines for written assignments, and their ability to interact or connect with certain people. The importance of time was explored in an early class discussion of Lawyerland when Moglen posited that within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media. This statement struck me; not only had I observed this within the limited exposure that I have had to the legal community, I have also seen the ways in which it has impacted my personal and professional life. Looking at my life in terms of the opportunities I have had and the people I have met, I have realized that moving forward in my professional career the impact that time has had on my opportunities. Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that not only do I have to begin to take these time constraints more seriously, but also that how successful certain aspects of my life will be will be dependent on how wisely I use my time. Time (or at least our conception of time) places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. The concept of time can serve as an enabler and as an inhibitor.

As I said last time, the important first step was to figure out how to articulate the central idea in a sentence and to begin the essay with it. That hasn't happened.

"The importance of time was explored in an early class discussion of Lawyerland when Moglen posited that within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media." (Usually, when we use a surname in formal writing, we give it an addition. I don't mind being "Eben" at all, but I'm "Professor" or "Mr." if you use my surname, right?) Did I "posit" something, or state it? Surely you don't think I said that "within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media"? I said, "time is the most important medium in which lawyers work." "Medium" there means tool of art, as oil paint, watercolor, terra cotta or cast bronze. If the idea struck you at the time, then we might expect you to explain what I meant, which you don't.

 

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Although I loved my undergrad experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally as an individual, Columbia Law School has shown me over and over again that this is not the way of the world and if I continue to view the world like this, there will not be much room for advancement. In order to achieve some balance, I have to reconcile the ways in which I used to view time with the new ways in which I am being asked to utilize time. As I step back and realize that I am finished with my first year of law school, I realize that I am an adult. I am in professional School. I am now not only responsible for my own financial and personal needs, but also those of my clients. Even though I am placed in a position of power, I feel that I really do not possess a lot of power. Rather I feel like I am being impacted by time rather than controlling it. I have found that there is a tension in the two ways in which I view time. There is a tension between getting things (as in going through the motions) and doing things with purpose (with passion). The first is just following a specific structure. This utilizes efficiency and allows things to get done in a timely fashion. Just because you are in the motion of doing something does not mean that you will be doing that thing whole heartedly. Meeting deadlines and completing something in a certain fashion often comes at the cost of being able to application of creativity and imagination to the written assignment.
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In fact, it was something that was openly talked about without shame. If <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">a student didn’t believe that <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">they would be able to produce quality work within a specific time period, <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">they should not be forced to do so. I remember I didn’t turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline, and I still received an A in the class. That’s not to say that I didn’t respect the deadlines that my professor had set for me. Instead I came to appreciate the pursuit of knowledge and gained confidence in the belief that there was a level of knowledge on a subject that I could reach before I was asked to produce a product that reflected my knowledge on a topic.

Surely you can render this last sentence in 10 words instead of 44? In addition to brevity, the writing lacks concreteness. Every noun here is abstract.

In looking at time; it had always been my philosophy that <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">things will work <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">itself out versus me finding the need to take advantage of time and using it to shape the outcome of events.

Neither terse nor grammatical. The semi-colon is wrongly used. "Philosophy" is a high word for habit. The sentence means "In the past, I have been undisciplined in my management of time." That's 12 words doing better the work of 35.

Although I loved that my <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">undergrad experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally as an individual, Columbia Law School has shown me over and over again that this is not the way of the world and if I continue to view the world like this, there will not be much room for advancement.

A run-on sentence badly composed. It means "Law school is forcing me to reconsider the habits that served me well in college." That's 15 words doing better the work of 50. Do you see from these examples what editing habits you need to acquire? Writing simply and clearly well help you to think more clearly and more forcefully.

In order to achieve some balance, I have to reconcile the ways in which I used to view time with the new ways in which I am being asked to utilize time. As I step back and realize that I am finished with my first year of law school, I realize that I am an adult. I am in professional School.

Why the capital S?

I am now not only responsible for my own financial and personal needs, but also those of my clients. Even though I am placed in a position of power, I feel that I really do not possess a lot of power. Rather I feel like I am being impacted by time rather than controlling it.

Isn't that precisely the consequence of an undisciplined approach to time? Social action occurs "in" time. Understanding, predicting and intervening in social processes requires good timing. Waiting for "things to work [themselves] out" is the antithesis of a disciplined approach to social action. It is, in other words, not lawyering. For the lawyer, patience—playing a waiting game, enjoying the fruits of time—is a tactical decision, arrived at in order to achieve a specific objective at tolerable cost. It isn't a habit, a "philosophy," or a symptom of untreated anxiety.

I have found that there is a tension in the two ways in which I view time. There is a tension between getting things (as in going through the motions) and doing things with purpose (with passion). The first is just following a specific structure. This utilizes efficiency and allows things to get done in a timely fashion. Just because you are in the motion of doing something does not mean that you will be doing that thing whole heartedly. Meeting deadlines and completing something in a certain fashion often comes at the cost of being able to application of creativity and imagination to the written assignment.

This is coherent with what precedes it. Organization of the essay, weak throughout, breaks down here. Degree of commitment to an activity (among which two possible degrees are "passion" and "going through the motions") seems evidently a new subject, intruding in a fashion the reader has not been given a basis to expect or understand.

The last sentence is a statement of a personal condition, not a general truth. "Meeting deadlines and completing something in a certain fashion" (a typically abstract phrase) is only in tension with "being able to [apply] creativity and imagination" to "a written assignment" if one hasn't gained habits of disciplined work, and if writing remains a puzzle, an obstacle, rather than a way of producing imaginative, creative results. (Note how weak your self-editing was: You left an ungrammatical sentence, containing the nonsense phrase "being able to application of creativity," unrevised.)

 

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How society tends to conceptualize time can often be more complicated then this simple assertion.

Then why did you begin your paragraph with it? The reader inevitably gains the impression that you don't know where you're going and you're just wasting her time.

The value that <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">people within society <span style="background-color: #cc6688; color: yellow; padding-left: 3px; padding-right: 3px">places on time can also vary with what they place value on.

Another thundering tautology, expressed ungrammatically. You must edit every sentence for agreement of number in each clause; your mistakes of this kind are frequent, and you must catch all of them.

On the one hand, it does lead to perceived practical outcomes; people are more focused, work with more of a sense of urgency, and work becomes more efficient. On the other hand, it constrains what an individual can focus on. Sometimes precision has to be sacrificed because of the sense of urgency that is placed on something. Also, what can be focused on becomes much more limited. In order to achieve one, the other has to be discarded.

What is "it"? Grammatically, it would seem to be "the value that people place[] on time." But that doesn't make sense here. The remainder of the paragraph seems to assert that we trade efficiency in time for precision or (and?) breadth of focus. Perhaps this is true, perhaps it isn't. Better management of time should impose fewer such trade-offs. I tell the lawyers who work for me that we enjoy the benefit of practicing law slowly, because of the economic organization of our practice. But that doesn't mean we are less productive, or efficient: it means that we don't sell hours, so we don't measure our activity by the number of tasks per hour. We measure rather the number and quality of results achieved with the available resources, including but not limited to working time.

Without a doubt, people who have come before questioned how they could best utilize the time that was available to them, organized their time in light of the different constraints that exist, and impacted how people in the present reflect upon their time.

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This isn't a conclusion, following something that isn't an argument or the development of an idea.

We haven't moved far enough past the first draft. We need a clearer and more precise central idea, stated at the outset, developed through steps that can be placed in sequence on a tightly-edited outline. We need accurately composed sentences that are brief, clear, and concrete.

Certainly it would be desirable to connect what you have to say with the ideas of others. But "integrating more outside sources" (why "more"? there aren't any here) is not an independent objective: thinking better about the subject is the objective. Reading what other people think about the same and related subjects is a step in that direction. I would have expected you to begin in that fashion: "I'm going to write something about time and work: Who has written about time and work in ways I might find useful in order to build my own thinking?" Why didn't that happen?

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Within any career, facets of time can have an impact on the effectiveness of an employee. Time can determine how much time efficiently a person can complete an assignment, who that employee is able to interact with, or even how likely that person is to advance within their career. These constraints can create an even bigger challenge within the job of the lawyer. Lawyers have to worry about statute of limitations, deadlines for written assignments, and their ability to interact or connect with certain people. The importance of time was explored in an early class discussion of Lawyerland when Moglen posited that within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media. This statement struck me; not only had I observed this within the limited exposure I have had to the legal community, I have also seen the ways in which it has impacted my personal and professional life. Looking at my life in terms of the opportunities I have had, the people I have met, and moving forward in my professional career that I have chosen for myself, the way in which I have consistently viewed time has been weighing on me. Entering a profession where time is both literally and figuratively of the essence, I have realized that not only do I have to begin to take these time constraints more seriously, but also that how successful certain aspects of my life will be, will be dependent on how wisely I use my time. Time (or at least our conception of time) places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. The concept of time can serve as an enabler and as an inhibitor.
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In undergrad, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was not frowned upon. In fact, it was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn’t believe that they would be able to produce quality work within a specific time period, they should not be forced to do so. I remember I didn’t turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline, and I still received an A in the class. That’s not to say that I didn’t respect the deadlines that my professor had set for me. Instead I came to appreciate the pursuit of knowledge and gained confidence in the belief that there was a level of knowledge on a subject that I could reach before I was asked to produce a term paper. In looking at time; it had always been my philosophy that things will work itself out versus me finding the need to take advantage of time and using it to shape the outcome of events. Although I loved my undergrad experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally as an individual, Columbia Law School has shown me over and over again that this is not the way of the world and if I continue to view the world like this, there will not be much room for advancement. In order to achieve some “balance,” I have to reconcile the ways in which I used to view time with the new ways in which I am being asked to utilize time.

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Although I loved my undergrad experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally as an individual, Columbia Law School has shown me over and over again that this is not the way of the world and if I continue to view the world like this, there will not be much room for advancement. In order to achieve some balance, I have to reconcile the ways in which I used to view time with the new ways in which I am being asked to utilize time. As I step back and realize that I am finished with my first year of law school, I realize that I am an adult. I am in professional School. I am now not only responsible for my own financial and personal needs, but also those of my clients. Even though I am placed in a position of power, I feel that I really do not possess a lot of power. Rather I feel like I am being impacted by time rather than controlling it. I have found that there is a tension in the two ways in which I view time. There is a tension between getting things (as in going through the motions) and doing things with purpose (with passion). The first is just following a specific structure. This utilizes efficiency and allows things to get done in a timely fashion. Just because you are in the motion of doing something does not mean that you will be doing that thing whole heartedly. Meeting deadlines and completing something in a certain fashion often comes at the cost of being able to application of creativity and imagination to the written assignment.
 

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In undergrad, asking a professor for an extension on a paper was not frowned upon. In fact, it was something that was openly talked about without shame. If a student didn’t believe that they would be able to produce quality work within a specific time period, they should not be forced to do so. I remember I didn’t turn in a term paper until two months after the initial deadline, and I still received an A in the class. That’s not to say that I didn’t respect the deadlines that my professor had set for me. Instead I came to appreciate the pursuit of knowledge and gained confidence in the belief that there was a level of knowledge on a subject that I could reach before I was asked to produce a term paper. In looking at time; it had always been my philosophy that things will work itself out versus me finding the need to take advantage of time and using it to shape the outcome of events. Although I loved my undergrad experience allowed me to grow personally and professionally as an individual, Columbia Law School has shown me over and over again that this is not the way of the world and if I continue to view the world like this, there will not be much room for advancement. In order to achieve some “balance,” I have to reconcile the ways in which I used to view time with the new ways in which I am being asked to utilize time.

 

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That might be a good way to put a point in an aide-memoire in the classroom, but as the articulated predicate for an essay, it needs editing. It does not, for example, literally mean anything. Why didn't you think through the idea it represented, and re-express that idea precisely?

This assertion rings true in many areas within the legal field.

"Within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media" rings true in many areas of the legal field? You can't have edited that paragraph with anything like ruthlessness, can you?

Statute of limitations limit the time in which you can file a claim in court. The memories of witnesses change over time. People either die or become hard to find if enough time elapses. The type of information that lawyers can uncover and develop is also limited by time. Time (or at least our conception of time) places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. I have come to ponder what is the reasoning behind these constraints? Are they beneficial to society? Or, in a twisted way, do they serve as a hindrance to the ways in which society develops?

Or, in a straightforward way, do you have any alternative to the decay of witnesses' memories or the tendency of people to die "if enough time elapses"? Does death, in a twisted way, serve as a hindrance to the way society develops? What is the reasoning behind death and is it beneficial to society?

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Deadlines for internships and assignments will constrain the amount of time and focus that I will be able to allocate to other things. Some conscious decisions of time will have to be reached if I am to achieve some sort of professional, personal, and academic balance. In a similar way, the legal realm is structured around time. Time determines how the lawyer will proceed with the case and what kind of outcome they can expect to result from their work.

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And what is another plausible argument? Is this not tautology?

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That last turgid sentence is a conclusion?

I think the way to begin here is to express an idea, simply, in a sentence, that you believe to be novel, and to outline the steps it would take to explain the idea fully, and to permit the reader to explore some of its implications. You might then want to do a little reading. There's a fair amount of philosophy about time, no shortage of physics, some neuropsychology, plenty of literature. You might look at my comments on JasonPykeFirstPaper for some suggestions.

I think it would be sensible to plan, whatever you do with this draft, to make your second paper something about law. This essay may well turn out to be a capable exploration of a topic in metaphysics, but it will help both of us in the longer run if, in addition to my grasp of your skills as a philosophical writer, I can speak with some authority about your capacities and development as a lawyer.

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Time, and the constraints that it creates, does create a sense of order. Time forces people to structure their lives in a way that maximizes outcomes. However, time does create hard boundaries. In a sense, it can become an obstacle to doing what one wants to accomplish. It would be difficult to think of a world where time and deadlines didn’t drive people to read enough for an exam, submit a paper by a certain time, or meet with someone about sensitive information as soon as possible.
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During one of the class’ discussions on Lawyerland, I wrote down “within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media.” This assertion rings true in many areas within the legal field. Statute of limitations limit the time in which you can file a claim in court. The memories of witnesses change over time. People either die or become hard to find if enough time elapses. The type of information that lawyers can uncover and develop is also limited by time. Time (or at least our conception of time) places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. I have come to ponder what is the reasoning behind these constraints? Are they beneficial to society? Or, in a twisted way, do they serve as a hindrance to the ways in which society develops?
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During one of the class’ discussions on Lawyerland, I wrote down “within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media.”

That might be a good way to put a point in an aide-memoire in the classroom, but as the articulated predicate for an essay, it needs editing. It does not, for example, literally mean anything. Why didn't you think through the idea it represented, and re-express that idea precisely?

This assertion rings true in many areas within the legal field.

"Within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media" rings true in many areas of the legal field? You can't have edited that paragraph with anything like ruthlessness, can you?

Statute of limitations limit the time in which you can file a claim in court. The memories of witnesses change over time. People either die or become hard to find if enough time elapses. The type of information that lawyers can uncover and develop is also limited by time. Time (or at least our conception of time) places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. I have come to ponder what is the reasoning behind these constraints? Are they beneficial to society? Or, in a twisted way, do they serve as a hindrance to the ways in which society develops?

Or, in a straightforward way, do you have any alternative to the decay of witnesses' memories or the tendency of people to die "if enough time elapses"? Does death, in a twisted way, serve as a hindrance to the way society develops? What is the reasoning behind death and is it beneficial to society?

Are you kidding?

 

In Light of My Law School Experience

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As I step back and realize that I am almost halfway through my second semester of my first year of law school, I see that time will impact the activities I chose to participate, how committed I will be to these activities, and how I will begin to structure the rest of my legal experience. Deadlines for internships and assignments will constrain the amount of time and focus that I will be able to allocate to other things. Some conscious decisions of time will have to be reached if I am to achieve some sort of professional, personal, and academic balance. In a similar way, the legal realm is structured around time. Time determines how the lawyer will proceed with the case and what kind of outcome they can expect to result from their work.
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As I step back and realize that I am almost halfway through my second semester of my first year of law school, I see that time will impact the activities I chose to participate, how committed I will be to these activities, and how I will begin to structure the rest of my legal experience.

Participate in. I don't understand what idea this sentence was intended to express. What is the outline here?

Deadlines for internships and assignments will constrain the amount of time and focus that I will be able to allocate to other things. Some conscious decisions of time will have to be reached if I am to achieve some sort of professional, personal, and academic balance. In a similar way, the legal realm is structured around time. Time determines how the lawyer will proceed with the case and what kind of outcome they can expect to result from their work.

"The lawyer" is a she or a he, not a they. What have you said here, other than that in the physical universes, time transpires forward, uniformly?
 

What does One Gain and Lose

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A plausible argument is that time is definitive. Day turns into night, seasons change, and our bodies age; these are all markers of time passing and changing. Time as a concept that is often taken for granted; how society tends to conceptualize time can often be more complicated. On the one hand, it does lead to perceived practical outcomes; people are more focused, work with more of a sense of urgency, and work becomes more efficient. On the other hand, it constrains what an individual can focus on. Sometimes precision has to be sacrificed because of the sense of urgency that is placed on something. Also, what can be focused on becomes much more limited. In order to achieve one, the other has to be discarded. Without a doubt, people who have come before questioned what their times mean, organized their time in light of the different constraints that exist, and impacted how people in the present reflect upon their time. How can one be sure that the conceptualization of time that present day society operates under is the correct one?
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A plausible argument is that time is definitive. Day turns into night, seasons change, and our bodies age; these are all markers of time passing and changing.

And what is another plausible argument? Is this not tautology?

Time as a concept that is often taken for granted; how society tends to conceptualize time can often be more complicated. On the one hand, it does lead to perceived practical outcomes; people are more focused, work with more of a sense of urgency, and work becomes more efficient. On the other hand, it constrains what an individual can focus on. Sometimes precision has to be sacrificed because of the sense of urgency that is placed on something. Also, what can be focused on becomes much more limited. In order to achieve one, the other has to be discarded. Without a doubt, people who have come before questioned what their times mean, organized their time in light of the different constraints that exist, and impacted how people in the present reflect upon their time. How can one be sure that the conceptualization of time that present day society operates under is the correct one?

 
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What does this last question mean? Is there some other "conceptualization of time" in which we don't have deadlines because every day lasts as long as we want it to? Is it the theory of general relativity or the forty-hour workweek you are reconsidering?
 

Thoughts Moving Forward

Time, and the constraints that it creates, does create a sense of order. Time forces people to structure their lives in a way that maximizes outcomes. However, time does create hard boundaries. In a sense, it can become an obstacle to doing what one wants to accomplish. It would be difficult to think of a world where time and deadlines didn’t drive people to read enough for an exam, submit a paper by a certain time, or meet with someone about sensitive information as soon as possible. Since it is essential, and it has impacted the ways in which people realize their everyday experiences, it is important to acknowledge how time is impacting how people view themselves, how people live their daily lives, and how members in society interact with one another.

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That last turgid sentence is a conclusion?

I think the way to begin here is to express an idea, simply, in a sentence, that you believe to be novel, and to outline the steps it would take to explain the idea fully, and to permit the reader to explore some of its implications. You might then want to do a little reading. There's a fair amount of philosophy about time, no shortage of physics, some neuropsychology, plenty of literature. You might look at my comments on JasonPykeFirstPaper for some suggestions.

I think it would be sensible to plan, whatever you do with this draft, to make your second paper something about law. This essay may well turn out to be a capable exploration of a topic in metaphysics, but it will help both of us in the longer run if, in addition to my grasp of your skills as a philosophical writer, I can speak with some authority about your capacities and development as a lawyer.


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Time Waits for Nothing

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Intro

During one of the class’ discussions on Lawyerland, I wrote down “within the legal realm, time is one of the most important realms of legal media.” This assertion rings true in many areas within the legal field. Statute of limitations limit the time in which you can file a claim in court. The memories of witnesses change over time. People either die or become hard to find if enough time elapses. The type of information that lawyers can uncover and develop is also limited by time. Time (or at least our conception of time) places constraints on how lawyers and people in society operate. I have come to ponder what is the reasoning behind these constraints? Are they beneficial to society? Or, in a twisted way, do they serve as a hindrance to the ways in which society develops?

In Light of My Law School Experience

As I step back and realize that I am almost halfway through my second semester of my first year of law school, I see that time will impact the activities I chose to participate, how committed I will be to these activities, and how I will begin to structure the rest of my legal experience. Deadlines for internships and assignments will constrain the amount of time and focus that I will be able to allocate to other things. Some conscious decisions of time will have to be reached if I am to achieve some sort of professional, personal, and academic balance. In a similar way, the legal realm is structured around time. Time determines how the lawyer will proceed with the case and what kind of outcome they can expect to result from their work.

What does One Gain and Lose

A plausible argument is that time is definitive. Day turns into night, seasons change, and our bodies age; these are all markers of time passing and changing. Time as a concept that is often taken for granted; how society tends to conceptualize time can often be more complicated. On the one hand, it does lead to perceived practical outcomes; people are more focused, work with more of a sense of urgency, and work becomes more efficient. On the other hand, it constrains what an individual can focus on. Sometimes precision has to be sacrificed because of the sense of urgency that is placed on something. Also, what can be focused on becomes much more limited. In order to achieve one, the other has to be discarded. Without a doubt, people who have come before questioned what their times mean, organized their time in light of the different constraints that exist, and impacted how people in the present reflect upon their time. How can one be sure that the conceptualization of time that present day society operates under is the correct one?

Thoughts Moving Forward

Time, and the constraints that it creates, does create a sense of order. Time forces people to structure their lives in a way that maximizes outcomes. However, time does create hard boundaries. In a sense, it can become an obstacle to doing what one wants to accomplish. It would be difficult to think of a world where time and deadlines didn’t drive people to read enough for an exam, submit a paper by a certain time, or meet with someone about sensitive information as soon as possible. Since it is essential, and it has impacted the ways in which people realize their everyday experiences, it is important to acknowledge how time is impacting how people view themselves, how people live their daily lives, and how members in society interact with one another.


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