• Sure. Consider my two original sentences in context: "They [the Chinese Communist Party and other regimes trying to control the net] cannot employ voluntarism to manufacture unfreedom as we can to manufacture freedom, so they are compelled to an eternal drain of resources making enough unfreedom to keep under control the freedom we manufacture for free. Our strategy is to drive up their costs by helping people to want to be free." Because unfreedom has to be paid for out of the regime's resources, and is directly proportional at best to the amount of free conduct going on, increasing peoples' propensity to behave freely drives the costs of control to the breaking point. Increasing peoples' propensity to behave freely requires only stimulating their hunger for free expression and their contempt for those who need to interfere with it.

• I think this is a finished revision. I don't find myself fully satisfied with the argument, but I believe those are disagreements rather than deficiencies in the essay.

I wonder if in the meantime you can expand on this comment, I'm not sure I follow: Our strategy is to drive up their costs by helping people to want to be free.

Thank you. Lauren

• In addition to aggregation, there's a multiplication of comment and assessment. You can just as easily find lots of people who have read all the coverage , with either an exacting or a highly-opinionated eye, and who are therefore in at least as good a position to figure out what the coverage means as you are yourself. (With respect to figuring out what's actually going on, however, it would be more accurate to say that they are in no worse position to figure out than you are yourself, because everyone is entirely dependent on the uncertain value of the actual reporting.)

• But in that world of superabundant commentary as well as instant aggregation of all available primary reporting, there will also be an immensely greater flow of available primary sources confirming the primary reporting, as real-time government and industrial data feeds you can subscribe to by RSS and equivalent protocols explosively mutiply. So what becomes scarce is judgement, which is the resource for which people will pay.

• That's parallel to the development of all professional careers: it is in the end, a matter of people's willingness to pay for your judgment. So professional judgment becomes the value in the enterprise, as cognitive alertness is for a copyeditor.

• If you take this analysis slightly further you get to the heart of the matter. Their business was buying commodity information and adding advertising, thus making a retail product. Advertisers no longer need them, however, because they can push only where the eyeballs are, and when they associate themselves with pull media, they reach people who are likely to be interested, and when they associate themselves with search they are reaching the best prospects of all: the people who are already looking. (You see a piece of this in diagnosing the problem of cartelizing local media, which no longer are reaching people already looking for what they provide, which is the news of right here. Microjournalism, written by local people of good judgment based on their review of all the subscribable narrowcast feeds affecting their neighbors, is the future after the local newspaper. Since it doesn't have to buy newsprint, run printers, or distribute a product, it can support the microjournalist who writes it without an advertising income.) So the advertisers are abandoning the newspapers young people will never acquire the habit of reading, which is not a problem for reporters with good judgment, just a problem for all the people whose association with newspapers was what was wrong with newspapers.

• Actually, we all rely on other judgment than our own to some degree, and most people would rather rely on judgment which is loud, fake and unrealistic than on judgment that has nuance and is complex to understand. Hence societies are governed, as all institutions are, by bullshit and fairy tales.

• No have to. But will be able to. This isn't "the Obama Administration," any more than adoption of cars by the federal government was "the Harding Administration." Government is beginning to do what everyone is beginning to do: move beyond the "Web as some new kind of channelized television" model to an understanding of the Net as built from trillions of specialized subscribable dataflows that are the content of our new superorganism's nervous systems. So anyone can learn anything and report a judgment to anyone else who wants to be informed of that judgment's occurrence. The "thinking for yourself" paradigm has to be reconsidered: for some purposes it is precisely diametrically wrong: the value of the net is in having the very wisest people on earth thinking for you.

• This preceding paragraph is wooly. The preceding transition is abrupt; you need more clarity within the graf and in relation to the context.

• "Pushing back" is a poor metaphor. They want to make specific design modifications in the network structure of their portion of the superorganism, but they cannot afford to isolate themselves entirely. They can use state control of telecommunications to attempt filtration at the boundary, but pervasive encryption technology increasingly thwarts that effort. Proxy-servers outside their control pretty much assure that anyone intelligent and determined can receive and transmit anything to the world at large. The Chinese intensively employ human judgment and monitoring to control many-to-many realtime and threaded human interactions in the net, which means they ultimately require someone to act as an official censor in every online community. They cannot employ voluntarism to manufacture unfreedom as we can to manufacture freedom, so they are compelled to an eternal drain of resources making enough unfreedom to keep under control the freedom we manufacture for free. Our strategy is to drive up their costs by helping people to want to be free.

• This is not actually a conclusion, just a rhetorical flourish. You should put here something that appeals to the reader's intellectual curiosity, not merely the taste for mild anti-popular irony.

• Overall, a very good start. One more revision and you should be getting close.

Here's my first attempt for your review. Thank you. Lauren

The Internet, the News Ecosystem and the Rational Ignorant fool.

-- By LaurenKlein - 08 Nov 2009

Section I: The Anecdote

Then it came. The Internet. (Cue scary music.)

Of course it wasn’t overnight, but it kind of felt that way. And as one of Palfrey’s digital natives, I suppose I was relatively comfortable with and excited about the digital emersion. The editors, middle-aged local diehards, who had lived and worked in this town their whole life, however, only new one way to do things. You brainstorm, make some calls, report, write, file the story. Then wait to see the piece in the morning paper and hope the copy editors didn't insert a typo into the headline.

In the three years since I left the paper in 2006, it has changed ownership three times. It no longer stands alone, but it is part of a conglomerate of Connecticut newspapers. I forget who owns them now. Last I heard it was Hearst.

This concentration of ownership probably killed the paper because instead of local news, readers now get more reports about local news in Hartford. But at the time, the staff worried more that the Internet wouldn't let us do our jobs. Instead it was all about citizen journalism. Citizen Journalism? We bemoaned. Seriously? What about balance? How could a retired architect get the facts right about my zoning meetings?

Perhaps it was the atmosphere I was in, but I worried too. Though I intuitively understood that ease of distribution and peer to peer communication could better serve a community’s access to information, the changes implemented to “leverage the Internet” at our paper (i.e. stick what you wrote for the print publication online) didn’t seem to serve that end. I was confused about how the Internet would make for a better news ecosystem. I left journalism.

The story of The Stamford Advocate is ubiquitous. And as Eben pointed out during his class discussions, the news, music, and software industries — industries formed on the premise of content ownership —are reeling because the Internet demands a new flow of information.

“The end point is not that there won’t be news, but that there won’t be ownership,” he said in class.

Section II: The News Ecosystem in an Internet Age

We haven’t quite delved into the shape of this new “news ecosystem” in class but some of the arguments around copyleft and free software can help further refine how digital technology and the Internet impacts the shift occurring in the news industry and how citizens should be able to “consume” news.

There might not be journalism as we understand and consume it today, but there will be information that any citizen can access and comment on and use to affect political and social change. Information is power and understanding technology allows for the access and control of information.

The best of the world’s news information won’t come from the top down media. Perhaps curration models that integrate news articles, videos and commentary about one single event from around the world will be presented in one format so a news “consumer” can read and watch multiple accounts of the event without having to do the web search and hit each individual news site. Perhaps the echo chamber will disappear and you will read the New York Times story along side the Al Jazeera story along side the Chinese media account and decide they all got it wrong and incomplete. Or, that without each account, none of them could ever provide a complete narration.

Legacy news companies (Fox, CNN, New York Times company, etc.) aren’t comfortable with that because their revenue comes from ad sales and eyeballs. It’s sort of ironic and sad however, that news organizations would be so opposed to networked technology that aggregates information from multiple sources, since the news industry has always relied on the news network (AP, Reuters, BBC World Service) and these networks’ contacts of local stringers to gather information; particularly in a global context. Trying to beat the other news services and the demand to produce revenue only hurts their product: information. Perhaps RSS feeds and RSS Readers solve some of this problem for a news consumer, but perhaps there can be (or already exists) a more efficient manner with which to read and evaluate the news of the day from multiple sources.

Section III: Rational Fools

The information ecosystem in a digital age is messy. There will be no one to tell us how to think. We will not simply be able to escape behind one narrative of current events. Users must care and take responsibility for seeking and understanding the subtleties of information for themselves. Otherwise we risk becoming one of Dostoevsky’s rational ignorant fools. “Push” media relies on the rational fool. The Internet could allow us to emerge from that fog.

The role out of Data.gov by the Obama administration represents the services of a digital news ecosystem that allow citizens to be engaged and not just informed. This is certainly a dramatic change for the way things have been done. Instead of an average citizen waiting for the news delivery each morning or night — i.e. waiting for a newsman to tell them what to think and how to think — people will have to think about and look at the facts for themselves.

The information about our governments can flourish in a way it never has before.

In most stable democratic societies the average citizen now has the greatest opportunity to impact government and culture. (Perhaps cliché and utopian, but true.)Technology can literally code our law, and if we don’t take ownership, we’ll remain those rational ignorant fools Dostoyevsky despised so much. In order to do so, however, technology must be easy to understand and share. A mindset must emerge — and already is among a certain demographic of tech savvy, socially minded individuals — that controlling and understanding the technology that controls your information is paramount. That’s where our power and ultimately freedom in a digital age exists.

Authoritarian regimes have already developed sophisticated methods for pushing back on the Internet, see China, Iran, and Russia. The U.S. and other democracies are frankly not that far behind.

If we don’t take advantage and reconfigure the policies that allow for more free flows of news information, we might as well just stick what we wrote for the print publication on the Web site. It certainly makes life easier when you’re blissfully ignorant.

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