Notes on Revisions
I have tried in my comments on your writing to offer directed
suggestions for improvement. These are only suggestions: the writing
is yours, and it's up to you to decide how to make it better. But
except in the few instances where I have found no way to suggest
improvement to something already excellent—a misfortune that
limits the possible "improvement" component of the
grade—everyone should make a revised draft.
In the wiki, the most convenient way to revise is to wipe out the old
draft and put your new draft on top. The "History" function then
allows me to see all the differences among versions conveniently,
making it easier for me to review your changes.
Often, in response to your first draft, I have suggested an approach
to the second draft that changes your viewpoint. Such a suggestion
("how about if you write a draft from the point of view of someone who
thinks [in this or that particular way] differently") is intended to
bring about an imaginative shift, for the length of the exercise, not
to force a change of opinion or commitment on your part. Sometimes,
nonetheless, it is valuable to write from another point of view, no
matter how stoutly we preserve our own.
I will be away from May 12 to June 1, doing some writing of my own.
Your revisions are due June 1. That means, for this part of the
process, you are on your own.
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EbenMoglen - 11 May 2017